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Band 4.5

Even though some cities have extensive public transportation system, many people still drive cars. why do you think this happens? how can people be encouraged to use more public transportation?

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It is true that some
people
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 still tend to
drive
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vehicles
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 in certain cities which have advanced public
transportation
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system
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systems
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.
Although
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 there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of
this
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 trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems. An array of factors may lead to why individuals prefer to
drive
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cars
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 rather than take public
transportation
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.
To begin
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 with, driving
vehicles
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 is more efficient and
effactive
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effective
 than
take
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 a
bus
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 or subway to reach their destinations, they do not need to spend time waiting for these
transport
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 systems. Take
myself
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 as an example. I am living in Taipei with complete public
transportation
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, I have multiple choices to commute but I still
drive
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 to my company since I do not want to waste time
to wait
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waiting for
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 the
bus
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 which
spend
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takes
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 twice
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the times
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times
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time
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 minutes for
community
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.
Moreover
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,
compares
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compared
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 to
train
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trains
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 or
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bus
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buses
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, private
cars
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 are more clean and comfortable generally, most
of
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apply
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citizens tend to have a private and fresh space, own
vehicles
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have
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has
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 been becoming their
priorities
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priority
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.
That is
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,
people
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 who care about the quality of ride experience would not choose to take public
transportation
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. Several solutions of individuals
dirve
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drive
 private
cars
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 rather than take public
transport
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 can
also
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 be taken to solve
this
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 issue. First of all, authorities should increase the frequency of
bus
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, train, subway and so on. To establish a more
effactive
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effective
transport
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 system, reducing the time of
people
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 waiting,
than
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then
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 they will be willing to take advantage of public
transportation
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. To be more specific, if the time-wasting problem
be
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is
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 tackled, more citizens will take public
transport
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 to commute and travel.
Secondly
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, governments can invest a lot of funding on maintaining each
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cars
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car's
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 sanitation,
such
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 as air-conditioning and
cleanse
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cleaning
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 more regularly.
For instance
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, Taiwanese prefer
high speed
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high-speed
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 rail rather than train in the same
distence
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distance
, even though the former's price is higher than the latter, because
high speed
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high-speed
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 rail
build
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builds
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 a comfortable environment
to
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for
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 customers. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned, a series of causes may result in
people
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 still
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drive
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driving
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 private
vehicles
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 in some cities
have
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that have
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 extensive public
transportation
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system
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systems
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 and the related
solusions
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solutions
 can be adopted to deal with
this
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 problem.

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Task Achievement
Enhance your thesis statement in the introduction to clearly outline the main points you will discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words and phrases more effectively to improve the flow of your ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your arguments, especially in the main points of the essay.
Content
You have identified relevant reasons why people still prefer cars over public transport.
Content
The use of personal experience adds a relatable element to your argument.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extensive
  • public transportation system
  • drive cars
  • convenience
  • comfort
  • privacy
  • commuting
  • status symbol
  • independence
  • limited accessibility
  • operating hours
  • viable
  • encouraged
  • sustainable transport
  • incentives
  • urban planning
  • public awareness
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