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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oreder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Others argue that there are more reasons for learning
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 consider that learning
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 can open many doors in your life. On the one hand,it is believed by some
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is just important if you want to travel or
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 if you live and
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 most of the time you do not need to
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, my brother learned
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 in his life ,but he did not
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 many advantages.In fact,if you learn an international
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because nowadays most
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 in English.
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 it will open for you the doors to get your dream job.A study published in
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said that the
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 it is easier to them to find a job.
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 think that learning
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 to improve
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 and to get the job which we dream
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with a good salary to survive.

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task achievement
Ensure clarity and correct structure in your introduction, outlining both views clearly before stating your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by better linking your ideas between sentences and paragraphs, using appropriate transition phrases.
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Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments, particularly in the body paragraphs.
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The essay presents a clear opinion and addresses both views on the topic.
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Some relevant examples are given, demonstrating the points being made.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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