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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The data survey shows the projections of the ages of the populations of
Yemen
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 and Italy for 2050
and
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as well as
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 for the year 2000. These pie charts are divided into three rates of age (0-14, 15-59, 60+). In 2000,
Yemen
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 had quite the same rate between children and adults, with only 3,6% of old
people
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.
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, the projection for 2050 will have a dramatic increase for the rate 15-59 with nearly
a
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60%, and it will have a decrease for the part of younger
people
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,
wheares
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whereas
 the older remain stable.
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, Italy, having a large amount of adults in 2000 with 61,6%, had a larger number of older
people
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 compared to
Yemen
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 with 24,1%, and the rest
was
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 children. The projection for 2050 for Italy will be double the number of 60+,
while
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 the
part
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 15-59 will have a slight decrease. The young
people
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,
instead
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, will remain stable
around
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at around
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 11,5%. In conclusion, both countries will have a significant rise in old
people
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 and will remain stable with young
people
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. The
changing
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of
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in
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 those two countries will be the
amount
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number
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 of adults in 2050,
that
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in
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apply
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Italy will lose around
the
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20% and
Yemen
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 will
be a doubling
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double
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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