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In recent time, many people are making the decision to live alone what are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negative effect on society?

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It is observed these days,
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majority section of the society
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 motivated to live independently, it is because the difference in perspective of parents and children has increased and at the same time the young generation are getting matured quite early. I believe that
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 is a positive impact which is to be discussed in the following paragraphs.
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, in recent times it can be observed that most of the older generation are dogmatic
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 the younger are open-minded. Parents have a set of rules - which they have followed throughout childhood - and they impose them on their children.
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, it is necessary to just focus on getting a degree.
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the young
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 it is equally important to gain real skills
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academics
. So to avoid
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 disagreement and protect the relationship , the young feel that they should move out as early as possible.
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, the young
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 are quite
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familiar
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digital
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the digital
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 world, and they are quite motivated by
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listening
 to
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 of society.
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The majority
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 of successful people will say something in common which is you must leave your comfort zone to be successful. So a place where parents do
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 of work like earning, cooking ,cleaning etc becomes a comfort zone and
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 the young crowd
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 want to leave their home to push them to learn all the necessary skills to survive in
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society.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider expanding your conclusion to summarize your main points better. This will help reinforce your arguments and provide a clearer wrap-up for your readers.
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Try to use more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance the depth of your writing. This can improve fluency and showcase your language skills more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors, as small inaccuracies can detract from the overall quality of your essay.
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The introduction effectively sets the context of the essay and presents your belief regarding the positive impact of living alone.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, which enhances the argument and makes it more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Independence
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Urbanization
  • Migration
  • Social norms
  • Individualism
  • Acceptance
  • Flexibility
  • Personal freedom
  • Career aspirations
  • Isolation
  • Technological advancements
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