More and more people are buying food that is ready to eat rather than choosing to eat home-cooked food. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
todays
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busy world, people rather to buy
foods
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that are ready to serve
other
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than
cooking
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food
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themselves. Even though buying
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food
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comes with
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benefits it has negatives as well. First of all, buying
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foods
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are more convenient for individuals with busy schedules. Nurses
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example, have to work long shifts at the hospital.
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, they
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have the energy nor the time to cook themselves lunch or dinner. In these cases buying
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from
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
chains makes more sense and is more
convinient
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convenient
rather than cooking and spending hours in
kitchen
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. Another benefit of
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food
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is
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accessibility. People with mobility or mental
helth
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health
issues might not be able to cook
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every day for themselves or their families.
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, ordering fast
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or any other kind of
ready to eat
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cuisines
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is a more
convinent
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convenient
way for them. Other than that, you can't always find
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stove to cook on when you are on a trip so
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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foods
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are the best option to go for.
however
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this
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ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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food
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has its cons. Most of these
ready to eat
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foods
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are fatty and are full of
suger
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sugar
which results in high obesity rates.
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, with the rise in
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ready-to-eat
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food
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consumption
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consumption,
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there are more healthy
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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food
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that are even
haelthier
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healthier
than
home-made
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homemade
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food
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. in conclusion, nowadays eating
ready to go
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ready-to-go
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food
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is
better
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and more
convinient
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convenient
option rather than home-cooked
food
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is
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. even though it has its cons
but
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its benefits outweigh the disadvantages
of
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it
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.

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Ensure that you provide a clearer thesis statement in your introduction to outline your main argument.
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Use linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
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Elaborate on the disadvantages more thoroughly to provide a balanced view of the topic.
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The essay addresses the topic and presents both advantages and disadvantages of ready-to-eat food.
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The examples used, such as nurses and people with mobility issues, are relevant and illustrate the point well.

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