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Band 5

It is often said "when is Rome, do as the Romans do". Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visit? do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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There is a trend for the vast majority of
people
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 to hold an opinion that
while
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 being in the other
country
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, they
are
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ought to follow the rules and culture of it. I strongly believe that the statement is absolutely true, and will support
this
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 view with arguments in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, often tourists who travel abroad to other
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country
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countries
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 do not have much knowledge about the cultural traditions of it and that in consequence leads to a lot of problems with local problems.
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 something is completely regular in their
country
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, there
it
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might be something rude and disrespectful for locals.
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, in most
of
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the
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countries gestures
such
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 as thumbs up are something normal that everyone
do
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, in Brazil, Colombia and other places where
crime
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the crime
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 rate is extremely high, it might seem like you are asking for
troubles
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.
Therefore
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, before going somewhere
people
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 should search for information about it and adapt to behave as
people
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 there do.
Secondly
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, as nowadays almost everybody has
ability
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 to surf the internet, it is easy to study
another cultures
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another culture
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 of countries.
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Although
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, if
person
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a person
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 does not know the language which is used in there, social media
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 information on any language for everyone. So individuals can learn at least the basics of culture without the knowledge of a language.
To conclude
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,
people
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 who are visiting
other
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another country
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country
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 should adapt to
its
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their
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 lifestyle to avoid causing inconveniences for others.
Furthermore
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, it is essential to at least know the fundamental factors of its culture to be respectful
for
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 everyone.

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Task Achievement
Enhance your conclusion by summarizing key points discussed in the body paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly define some terms or phrases for better understanding, e.g., 'culture'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking phrases to improve transitions between sentences and ideas, making your argument flow better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction effectively sets the tone and outlines your position on the topic.
Task Achievement
You provide relevant examples, particularly relating to cultural gestures, that support your arguments well.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adapt
  • accept
  • local customs
  • cultural immersion
  • enhance the travel experience
  • build relationships
  • smooth communication
  • misunderstandings
  • social isolation
  • conflicts
  • language barrier
  • cultural insights
  • participate in cultural activities
  • observe
  • local customs
  • language learning
  • deeper understanding
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