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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line chart illustrates the figure
tor
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for
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enquiries
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 in one city from Tourist Information Office over six
month
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months
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 in 2011. In general, the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 in person
have
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has
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a
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apply
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significant
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significantly
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 increased over the period in
this
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 year.
However
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, the
amount
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number
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 of
enquiries
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from
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by
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 telephone
have
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has
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decrease
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decreased
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 trend. As can be seen, almost the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 in three ways are lower than 1000 in January. In February, the amount
ot
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of
enquiries
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 in person had
increase
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increased
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 more 200,
it
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apply
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become
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became
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 600, but
from
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apply
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telephone and letter/email had
decrease
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decreased
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 by 800 and 700. From February to April, the figure of enquires still had
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a signicant
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signicant
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significant
increased
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 over 1200 in April. The
number
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 of
enquiries
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recieved
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received
 by telephone
also
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had
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increased by 1000 and
unchanged
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was unchanged
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 until April. In
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last
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the last
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 three
month
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months
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, the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 in person
had
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has
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 increased by nearly 2000 which is the highest of
enquires
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enquiries
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. The
number
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 of
enquiries
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stay
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stays
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 unchanged from
letter
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the letter
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 / email.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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