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#Task2 (Discussion) Some people think technology has made our lives easier, while others think it has made life complicated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays an increasing number of
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 are becoming concerned about
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 in our daily lives. There are two diametrically opposed opinions on the matter. Some
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 assert that
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 has made
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 easier
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 others state that
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 has made
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 more complicated. In the forthcoming lines of
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 essay, I shall discuss both sides of the argument and explain why I am in complete agreement with the letter's viewpoint. The first and foremost thing that some
people
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 feel is that
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 has made
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 easier.
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, modern
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 allows
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 to communicate with others from anywhere in the world complete tasks faster, and use smart devices to make
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 more convenient. Personally, I have helped
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 save time and solve everyday problems more easily.
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, it is
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 possible to mention that
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 sometimes causes addiction, reduces face-to-face communication and increases stress.
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, many
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 spend too much time on their phones and social media, which harms both their health and personal relationships. To summarize all the given information and opinions, my opinion is that there is truth in both views.
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, even though some individuals feel that
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 has made
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 easier, I agree with the opposing viewpoint. I personally have confidence in the opinion that
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 has made
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 more complicated

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task achievement
Ensure to elaborate more on your arguments with specific and relevant examples to strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve transitions between ideas for clearer flow, helping the reader understand the shift between viewpoints more easily.
introduction
The essay introduces the topic clearly and states the two viewpoints effectively at the beginning.
conclusion
The conclusion adequately summarizes your opinion and the discussed viewpoints.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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