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As part of education, students should spend a period of time studying and living in a different country to learn a different language and culture. Do you agree or disagree?

Difficulty in adaptation /
exchange
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students
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 may struggle to adapt
into
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 new environment – challenges in adaptation Faster
language
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 acquisition / they learn
language
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 faster than in their own
country
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 – better
language
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 learning Broad worldview /
they
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 may broaden their outlook –
broader
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 perspective It is sometimes suggested that to learn another
language
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 and culture a certain period of time should be spent by
students
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 living and studying in a foreign
country
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.
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this
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 experience can be difficult for them, in my
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students
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 can benefit greatly from
such
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exchange
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 programs. Adapting to a new environment can be a major challenge for
exchange
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students
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. They may struggle with cultural differences, homesickness, or even difficulties in making friends.
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students
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 from warm, sociable cultures may find it hard to adjust to the reserved nature of some European countries. I ,
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, believe that
students
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 would benefit significantly from
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 experience. One key benefit of studying abroad is faster
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 acquisition. When
students
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 are surrounded by native speakers, they have to use the
language
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 daily, which helps them improve quickly.
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students
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 who study in Spain often become fluent in Spanish much faster than those learning it in their home
country
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 because they are exposed to it in real-life situations. Another advantage is that studying in a different
country
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 broadens
students
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’ perspectives. Living in a foreign culture allows them to understand different traditions and viewpoints, making them more open-minded.
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,
students
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 who study in Japan not only learn the
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 but
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 gain a deeper appreciation for Japanese customs and
way
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 of life. In conclusion, studying abroad is not without, difficulties
particularly
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 in terms of adaptation to a foreign culture.
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,
this
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exchange
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 period can greatly enhance
language
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 skills and expand
students
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’ worldviews.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding some transitional phrases between paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas. For example, including phrases like 'On the other hand' or 'Additionally' can help guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
You might elaborate on the challenges of adaptation to provide a more balanced viewpoint. Including potential solutions or strategies that students can employ to overcome these challenges could strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your points are logically organized, and you provide strong examples to support your arguments, which enhances the overall clarity of your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • cultural awareness
  • global perspectives
  • pronunciation
  • adaptability
  • multinational companies
  • personal growth
  • social awareness
  • resumes
  • accessibility
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