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The table shows the contribution of various economic sectors to X country in 2016, 2017, and 2018.

The table shows the contribution of various economic sectors to X country in 2016, 2017, and 2018.
The given table illustrates the proportion of contribution from three different sectors (
agriculture
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, industry, and
service
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) to X country in three years (2016, 2017, and 2018).
Overall
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, compared with the other two sectors,
service
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 remained the highest point over the given period,
while
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agriculture
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 always took up the lowest point.
Furthermore
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, the figures for
agriculture
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 and industry went up,
whereas
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, when it comes to
service
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, it went down. In terms of
service
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, it accounted for 65% in 2016, after which it had a slight drop to 64% in 2017,
then
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 it experienced a significant drop and reached 55% in 2018.
On the other hand
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, in the case of industry, it made up 22% in 2016, and
then
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 it rose by a quarter in 2017, before reaching the highest point
at the end
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 of the period (30%).
Although
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agriculture
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 dropped by a tiny fraction (2%) in the first two years, it climbed to 15% in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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