The map shows A and B villages in 1995 and now.

The two maps show changes between 1995 and the Present.

Overall

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, it can be intelligibly seen that,

while

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in the formerly the village was more tree trunks, presently, it has become more lodgings community with flats and apartments. In 1995, the village had few Green shoots,

such

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as fresh air,

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and

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beautiful nature parks, and there were living placements, on the south part, was the sea, with fishing smack, with the addition of a

sport

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sports

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centre. In the present time, the western half of the village remains unchanged, and

has

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apply

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the original accommodation, the Hotel and housing have

also

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not been changed.

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, the untouched western part of the hotel became Modern and big. The place of fish market was reconstructed to the apartment,

moreover

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, on the

southern west

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southwest

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, fish boats were destroyed. In the middle of the area was a park, today it became a Holiday home, close to

built

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the built

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new car park,

in addition

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to the northern east the constructed Golf field near the Tennis course.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

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The map shows A and B villages in 1995 and now.

Some Countries have implemented mandatory community programs for young people. In these programs, children aged 16 to 18 do charity work, help old people or work with animals. What are some advantages and disadvantages for this for young people?

Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol. What is your opinion?

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?