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With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things.

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Although
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 mankind has conducted
succesfully
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successfully
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 a lot of experiments
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 discoveries regarding
out of
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the world
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 curiosity , these researches have come with too
expenditure
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 as much as only one country can not afford it.
With
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 spending
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the money
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 used for space discovery, nations could provide
significantly
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 opportunities where people ask for help in order to handle their issues
such
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 as starvation, poor living conditions, climate change and so on;
however
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i
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 think that space discovery is so significant that it can
effect
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 almost all areas. So, it is worth
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 despite the high amount of prices. (it can
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effect
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 almost all areas)

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task achievement
Work on refining your introduction to clearly present your argument and use correct punctuation. For example, remove the comma after 'Although'.
coherence and cohesion
Improve paragraph structure for better coherence. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea followed by supporting sentences.
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Include specific examples to support your points about how space exploration benefits humanity. This will strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You clearly present a debate between space exploration and addressing worldly issues, showing an understanding of multiple perspectives.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • terrestrial issues
  • alleviate suffering
  • living standards
  • reallocate
  • long-term benefits
  • urgent social issues
  • practical applications
  • environmental monitoring
  • telecommunications
  • financial burden
  • public and private partnerships
  • social programs
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