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The graph below gives information about the technology that households in one US city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014.

The graph below gives information about the technology that households in one US city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014.
The line graph provides key information about how households in a US city accessed
television
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 using four different types of technologies:
satellite
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,
cable
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,
internet
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, and
broadcast
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, between 2004 and 2014.
Overall
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,
internet
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 usage saw significant and consistent growth over the period.
In addition
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, eventually became the most common method of watching
television
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.
In contrast
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, the use of
cable
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 and
broadcast
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 declined steadily.
Satellite
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 TV experienced a modest increase with only minor fluctuations. In 2004,
broadcast
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television
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 was the most widely used, with just under 100,000 households, followed by
cable
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 and
satellite
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, both at 80,000.
Internet
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 usage was minimal, with fewer than 20,000 households. Over the next decade, the number of
internet
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 users increased sharply, overtaking all other technologies by 2010, and reaching almost 200,000 in 2014. Meanwhile,
cable
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 usage rose slightly until 2007, peaking at just under 120,000, but
then
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 dropped significantly to about 70,000 in 2014.
Broadcast
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television
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 saw a steady decrease, dropping from 80,000 in 2004 to below 20,000 by the end of the period.
Satellite
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 services showed a stable growth from 80,000 to around 110,000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, satellite, cable, internet, broadcast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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