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Today, people can buy food products from all over the world. Some believe this is a positive development, while others feel that only local food should be available. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no denying that international communication and trade have made it easier to transport goods, including
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, across countries.
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 some people believe that the wide availability of foreign
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 in supermarkets is beneficial, others argue that it has negative consequences.
This
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 essay will explore both perspectives before presenting my own opinion. On one hand, having access to
food
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 from different countries brings significant advantages. Consumers can enjoy a greater variety of
flavors
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flavours
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 and cuisines, which enhances their eating experience and introduces them to new cultures.
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, Indian spices, once considered as precious as gold, are now widely accessible
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 modern transportation and trade systems.
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, global trade often leads to competitive pricing, making both imported and local products more affordable.
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, importing
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 can lead to several problems.
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, local farmers may suffer as their products become less competitive compared to cheaper imports.
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 may result in abandoned farms and a decline in domestic agriculture.
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, imported
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 often contains preservatives to extend shelf life during long transportation periods. These chemicals may pose health risks, including potential links to cancer. Scientific studies have suggested that certain additives used in processed foods may contribute to rising cancer rates globally. In conclusion,
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 importing
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 allows for more choices and lower prices, it
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 presents risks to both public health and local economies. In my opinion, it is beneficial for consumers to have access to international products, but governments should
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 support local agriculture and encourage the consumption of fresh,
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food
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 to maintain a healthy balance.

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task achievement
Reinforce the distinction between the two viewpoints with clearer examples or personal anecdotes to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Vary your sentence structures and use linking words to enhance the flow between ideas, making transitions smoother.
coherence and cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with a logical progression of ideas.
task achievement
Examples provided, like Indian spices, effectively illustrate points made regarding the benefits of global food availability.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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