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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

In some countries, there are not enough medical or educational facilities in rural ares. Therefore, some people believe newly graduated teachers and doctors should be sent to work in rural area for sometime. Other people think that people should be free to choose where they work after graduation. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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[There is no doubt that these days] many (rural
areas
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) do not have enough (medical and educational services). [The question is:] should (newly graduated teachers and doctors) be sent to these places, or should they choose where to work? [In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.] [On the positive side], some people believe sending graduates to (rural
areas
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) can help solve the problem. [The main reason given to support
this
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 claim is that] many people in villages suffer because there are no (doctors or teachers). [To illustrate], in some countries, students in remote
areas
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 do not learn well because there are no qualified teachers. [
In other words
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],
this
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 step can improve lives in these places and give new workers experience. [
However
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], others think graduates should have freedom. [
Firstly
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], they studied hard for many years and should choose their own path. [
In other words
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], forcing them to work in (rural
areas
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) may make them unhappy. [
Secondly
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],
this
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 is because not everyone is ready to live in a place with poor facilities. [
Also
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], some may leave the job early, which can make the problem worse. [In conclusion], [
although
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 both sides have strong points], I believe (new graduates) should be encouraged, but not forced, to work in (rural
areas
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). [
Therefore
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], governments should offer rewards or support for those who go. [In conclusion], [
it is clear that
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] finding a balance between personal choice and helping society is the best solution for the future.

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples or anecdotes to strengthen your arguments, especially in the body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the transitions between ideas are smooth and coherent. Using linking words effectively can enhance the flow.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines what the essay will cover.
task achievement
Both sides of the argument are presented fairly, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rural areas
  • Essential services
  • Community development
  • Mandatory service
  • Professional skills
  • Career paths
  • Logistical challenges
  • Incentives
  • Scholarships
  • Financial challenges
  • Adaptable professionals
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