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Band 4

Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is this the case? What can we do to encourage people to use bicycles more? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that
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use
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the use
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bicycles
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 these days has become less than before.
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, they need a
lot
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 of motivation to
use
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 it in transport,
such
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 as going to work or shopping.
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, the car and the trains become the easiest way to go in every place. For
know
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 all the matters the time management these
case
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 make the people choose the other transportation to the
bicycles
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.
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, the weather
make
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causes
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 huge problems and be
diffuicult
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difficult
 to
use
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 it . The country must create a specific area in streets for
bicycles
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 in all the cities that will help to take
bicycles
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 because it will
ba
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be
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 faster .
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, not all people have
bicycles
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for
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this
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 issue it must have in every corner
in
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 the street have a
lot
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 of
bicycles
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that
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help to encourage them to
use
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it
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them
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.
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, In Riyadh is difficult to
use
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bicycles
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 In summer but,
know
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 is changed because
the
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they
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build
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 a specific place. In terms
they
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 created a big place for the children
the
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 will help the all family to go together.
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,
this
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make
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 the child grow in the idea they can
use
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 the
bicycles
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 for fun and
also
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 for transport.
In
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 the same
time
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time,
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 the idea of using the bicycle
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adopts
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 the healthy life vibes when we
used
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use
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 it a
lot
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 for transportation.
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,
of
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if
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 they
creat
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create
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application
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an application
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sends
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that sends
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 a message for the remaining
of
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the
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apply
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sport
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sports
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 activity and
recoummined
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encourages people
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 to
use
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bicycles
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 for today it will help a
lot
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that it flows logically from one to the next.
task achievement
Work on providing more detailed explanations and examples to support your points, making sure they directly relate to the prompts.
grammar and language use
Maintain consistent grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity.
task achievement
You have attempted to provide a range of ideas about promoting bicycle use, showing an understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Your use of examples, such as the situation in Riyadh, helps to illustrate your points and add depth to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • cycling infrastructure
  • bike lanes
  • bike-sharing programs
  • traffic calming measures
  • commute
  • subsidies
  • physical exertion
  • environmental benefits
  • safety regulations
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