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Many students find it is harder to study at university or college compared to when they were in grade school. Why is this? What are some possible solutions for this problem?

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In modern society, it is commonly observed that
students
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 who learn tertiary study have difficulties compared to their secondary school. In
this
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 essay, the main causes of the phenomenon and possible solutions will be examined in turn.
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 with, there are some obvious causes of the issue.
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, university
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 have quite different ways of learning. To be specific,
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 used to follow their teachers or do homework in their secondary school.
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, they are often required to do assignments, attend lectures a few times a week and write long essays, meaning that there are a lot of activities they should complete themselves.
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, university
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 should read hundreds of pages in a book for one lecture, which can put
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 under too much pressure.
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, complex
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 management is another reason.
Time
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 management becomes more complicated because
students
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 demand to complete their assignments, academic activities, research and even visit career fairs at the same
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 since competition in the job market is getting worse.
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, a couple of steps could be considered by schools and individuals to tackle the problem. In terms of individuals,
students
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 have to find the best way to manage their
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 for their lives, which is one of the essential skills in life, and
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 they should develop practical
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 management skills.
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, they can use smartphone applications
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 as calendars and to-do lists.
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, large companies should cooperate with universities, and
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 they often allow
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 to get opportunities that
students
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 are able to experience in job internships. It would be beneficial for companies because they can secure their future talented employees. In conclusion, there are some ways to tackle the issue
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 as cooperation with companies and learning how they control their
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-directed learning
  • Time management
  • Critical thinking
  • Independent study
  • Complexity
  • Academic support
  • Study skills
  • Workshops
  • Orientation programs
  • Financial aid
  • Work-life balance
  • Tutoring services
  • Self-discipline
  • Depth of understanding
  • Higher education
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