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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2000 to travel to and from school using different types mode of transport. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2000 to travel to and from school using different types mode of transport. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph demonstrates the data of a country about
number
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 of trips taken by students aged between 5 to 12 years to travel to and from school using different modes of transportation between 1990 and 2000. Over decade, there has been
significant
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 change in
number
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a number
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 of children opting for walking and
car
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cars
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. Around 4.2
million
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 used to prefer
car
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a car
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 in 1990 which have significantly increased to 10.5
million
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.
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 in 1990, 12.2
million
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 used to walk to school which dropped to half in 2000.
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, cycling, walking and bus had
equal
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 amount of 6
million
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 users in 1990 which sharply decreased to 2-3
million
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 by 2000. In comparison to all, changes in
usage
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the usage
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 of
bus
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buses
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 was minimal ranging from 7
million
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 in 1990 to 5
million
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 in 2000.
Overall
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 by 2000, more
number of
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apply
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students started preferring personal
mode
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modes
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 of transportation rather than public
transports
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transport
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 of physical mode.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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