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the table and charts below give informatiom on the poice budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Bretain. the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

the table and charts below give informatiom on the poice budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Bretain. the table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The table and the
piechats
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piecharts
pie charts
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 provide key information about the police budget from 2017 to 2018 in one zone in England , from where
money
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 got and how it could be scattered. The units are measured in
million
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pounds
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 and
percentage
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percentages
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.
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, it is clear from the graph that the national government had the highest source of budget across the years.
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, salaries occupied the majority of the amount of
money
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 spent,
whereas
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 technology encountered the least amount of expenditure.
According to
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 what is shown, the table showed that
national
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the national
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 government accounted for about 175.5
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 and continued to rise to 177.5
million
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pounds
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 in 2018. Local taxes
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 at 91.2
million
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pounds
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 and increased slightly to 102.3
million
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pounds
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. Other resources
such
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 as grants represented 38
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 and nearly stayed constant in 2018. In terms of spending
money
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, the pie charts showed that salaries accounted for 75% of
money
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 expenditure in 2017 and dropped slightly to 69%. Building and transport represented 17%,
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while
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which
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 remained stable in 2018. Generally, technology was 8% in 2017 and surged to 14% in 2018, but still had the lowest
of
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financial payments.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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