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The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. the table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparations where relevant.

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. the table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparations where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the distribution of online language populations as of December 2001, with a total of 529
million
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 internet
users
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. The table below the chart provides data on the number of people online from November 1997 to August 2001, expressed in millions and as a percentage of the global population.
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, English was the dominant language used online in 2001, accounting for nearly half of all
users
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. The number of internet
users
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 increased significantly each year during the shown period. In terms of language usage online, English clearly led with 43% of
users
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. Japanese and Chinese followed with 8.9% and 8.8% respectively, making them the second and third most used languages. Other notable languages included German (6.8%), Spanish (6.5%), and Korean (4.6%). Minor shares were taken by Italian (3.8%), French (3.3%), Portuguese (2.6%), and Dutch (2.1%). The table shows a steep rise in internet
users
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 from just 76
million
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 in November 1997 to 513
million
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 in August 2001. The most significant year-on-year increase occurred between August 2000 and August 2001, when the number jumped by 145
million
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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