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Band 1

In many countries, there is shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the country side, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the country?

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resident
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have increased at
unprecedented
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 rate, states should
bulid
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build
 new construction for those who are in need. Some people think
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new places for living
ough
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 to
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constructed
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commities
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communities
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 again.
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merites
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merits
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 trend. one of the obvious benefits of building
house
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 in urban
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 is protecting
earth
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 from pollution.
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, when rising, the
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population in a city leads to air
emmision
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emission
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 driving cars in a large number. Many developing
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economic
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Afghanistan
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conisderable
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considerable
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, wherein people have private
vicheles
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viceless
 and many houses have
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built in
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 one area. Another possible
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 of
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 trend is reducing traffic jams in the centres of those cities.

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task achievement
Consider improving your introduction by providing a clearer overview of the points you will discuss in the essay. Ensure to spellcheck terms and maintain grammatical accuracy.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of your ideas by using linking words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
task achievement
You've identified some important benefits of building new towns and acknowledged the complexity of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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