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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.
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The given pie graph provides information with data about the changes in
daily
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the daily
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 habits of individuals in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom from 1971 to 2001.
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, it is evident from the graph that , there were variations in the percentage
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of
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people's habits.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis, the graph illustrates that in 1971, food was the highest proportion, which accounted for 44% of the total. Followed by
car
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a car
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 which had just over a fifth. Turning to the
per cent
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percentage
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 of petrol , furniture and
restaurant
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restaurants
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 which had 10% , 9% and 7% , respectively.
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,
use
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the use
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computers
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of computers
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 was the lowest percentage, which was solely 2% .
On the other hand
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, there was
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a
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reverse trend in 2001,
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, there was a significant decrease
on
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in
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 food to 14% .in
an
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the
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oppesite
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opposite
, car witnesses rapidly increased to
become
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apply
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43% .
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, using computer experience
climbing
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climbed
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 by 10% ,
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 books dropped to be the lowest at only 1% .
Restaurant
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Restaurants
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 had
rise
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risen
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 by half .
According to
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 petrol , furniture had slightly declined to 8% .

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