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The charts show the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for study in 2004 and 2009.

The charts show the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for study in 2004 and 2009.
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The pie charts illustrate the different modes of transportation used by
people
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 for commuting to a university in 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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, it is evident that the ratio of
people
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 travelling by train, bus, bicycle and walking increased,
whereas
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 the preference for car decreased. Car and bus were the popular method of transportation among
people
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. Looking at the chart in more detail, in 2004, the usage of trains was 3%, which surged by 1% in 2009. The percentage of
people
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 who walk
for going
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 to a university moved from 4% to 6% in 2009. Around half of
people
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 were using the bus to commute for study in 2009, which was 33% in 2004. The priority for
bicycle
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bicycles
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 was
more
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higher
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 in 2009 than in 2004 noticed 16% and 9% respectively.
By contrast
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, the popularity of
car
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cars
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 for going to a university decreased by 23% in 2009, which was reported by 51% in 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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