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The map shows the changes to a residence hall between 2010 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the changes to a residence hall between 2010 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show a
residence
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hall
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 from 2010 to nowadays. These changes reflect the rapid infrastructure growth and modernization of the dormitory.
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, the
residence
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hall
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 has
suffer
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suffered
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 substantial transformations to adapt more students and improve facilities,
while
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 sacrificing some garden space for functional developments. In 2010, the
residence
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hall
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 had a relatively simple layout. The main entrance was situated at the bottom left of the map, leading into a hallway. On the left side, there
were
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 a
student
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 bedroom and a bathroom,
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 on the right side, two more
student
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bedrooms
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 and a kitchen were located.
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, there was a living room towards the top
center
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, nearby to one of the
bedrooms
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. Over time, significant changes have been made to the
residence
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hall
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. The living room has been replaced by two additional
student
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bedrooms
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, and another bedroom has been added where part of the garden used to be,
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 increasing the number of
student
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bedrooms
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 from three to six.
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, the kitchen has been expanded and transformed into a kitchen/social area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residence, hall, student, bedrooms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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