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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the IK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the IK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates the amount of time
spend
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 on phone calls in the UK and
classified
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 into three
section
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the
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Local,
The
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National and international and
mobiles
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mobile
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. The unit is measured in
billions
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.
Overall
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, the Local calls had both trends with growth and decline throughout the years. On
other
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 hand, the National and international
and
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apply
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mobiles have increased dramatically with
equally
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in
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numbers. In 1985, 72 billion minutes
had
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 recorded
on
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by
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 locals, and it
as
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increased sharply until 1999 with 90 billion minutes,
then
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 it
has
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dropped step by step in the next four years with 72 billion. Meanwhile The National and international had
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 significantly from 1995 to 2002 with 35 to 60
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billions
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billion
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 respectively.
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,
the
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at the
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begining
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beginning
 of the year 1995 the mobiles
are
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did
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 not
having
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have
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 a large number of
call
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calls
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,
it
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they
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 had only below 5
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billions
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billion
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 calls. But
at the end
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 of the year it had
grew
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 gradually to 45
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billions
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billion
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 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • trend
  • durations
  • categories
  • steady increase
  • notable rise
  • peak
  • reliance
  • landline services
  • fluctuations
  • decline
  • connectivity
  • dramatic increase
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • communication habits
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