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Some people believe that it is good to share as uch information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that sharing
research
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while
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 there is a commonly held belief that there are some valuable researches .
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However
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 I tend to believe that sharing
research
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 has
multi
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 advantages. It depends on the researcher and his decision. Let's begin with sharing
research
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on
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the
benefit
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benefits
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 and disadvantages of
this
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 title. On one hand the benefits of sharing like medical
research
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for instance
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 medicine. It
save
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lifes
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lives
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 and
health
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the health
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 of
poeple
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people
. On
other
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 hand if we refuse to share the
research
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. There is
no body
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nobody
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 will
make
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take
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 advantage of that even the
reasrcher
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researcher
him self
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himself
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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i
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 tend to believe that
research
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 should be
sharing
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shared
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 and
reporting
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reported
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.

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task achievement
Expand your arguments with more specific examples and detailed explanations to strengthen your points.
language use
Be attentive to spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors, as these can affect the clarity of your writing.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion in favor of sharing research, which is an important aspect of the task response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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