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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map provides information about the three different sites for establishing entertainment
centre
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centres
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 to serve the residents of the area.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that one of these places is empty ,
while
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 others
are occupy
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are occupied
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 by facilities
such
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 as houses and
factory
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factories
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.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis, the map illustrates that ,
initially
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 , the first is
industrial
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an industrial
the industrial
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 site which
located
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is located
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 in the southeast of the city and
main
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the main
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 road across in front of and
in
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on
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left
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the left
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 side of the factory .
Moreover
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, there is a river near
of
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apply
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its
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it
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. Turning to the second land, which is in the middle of the area and
surrounding
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 by the path and
alot
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a lot
 of plants.
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, it is
residential
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a residential
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 area , where the population lives. On the other side, on the top of the hill in
west
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the west
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 of the map , there is large land which
covered
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is covered
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 by solely trees and it is leisure from any buildings.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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