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Many university students nowadays live away from their home and their parents because of their university location, while others live with their families. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each situation? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Imagine you decide to study at a high school institution and encounter a dilemma to live alone or continue to enjoy a careless domestic
life
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This
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 essay reveals the pros and cons of living separately from relatives and sharing a house with
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. In my personal view living in a dormitory or rented flat develops youngsters’ self-sufficiency and decision-making
skills
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, being far from neglecting the advantages of
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 living, I would like to bring outcomes of the positive impact of separate living on
leadership
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skills
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 found in the scope of my scientific research. For
students
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 who continue to live at
home
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 during their studies, the major advantage is that they are almost free from domestic routines.
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, there is no necessity cooking meals or laundry and
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, there is more time for study and self-development.
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, the supportive attitude of parents leads to the absence of thinking about leaving. Because of the friendly
home
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 atmosphere,
students
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 are tuned to success.
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, excessive concern may develop negative habits like laziness and lack of motivation. The well-known psychological experiment “Universe - 25” demonstrated the collapse of the mice family
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 artificially eliminating any possible problems that they meet in their ordinary
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. These heavenly conditions were finalized by the complete disappearance of all mouses. The main advantage for
students
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 choosing to find accommodation at their college or ranting flats is that independent living develops
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life
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skills
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 as self-sufficiency and decision-making
skills
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. Comparatively
home
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 a dormitory
life
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 pushes
students
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 to be self-care and incorporate into their schedule
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 duties as cleaning, cooking, and family obligations that were previously done by parents. By combining study and daily routines
students
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 overcome all difficulties of
students
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’ challenging time.
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, drawbacks of individual living
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 as overcoming financial scarcities, budgeting, and adapting to homesickness develop
students
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’
leadership
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skills
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. Our research designed to specify the impact of accommodation on
leadership
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 demonstrated the highest rate of
leadership
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 in the first group of
students
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 who were renting flats. Dormitory residents and
students
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 living at
home
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 demonstrated lower results compared to the first group. In conclusion, we would like to admit that there is nothing wrong with using
home
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life
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 advantages if it diminishes obstacles and helps to fully concentrate on studies.
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, an independent
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 despite on more difficult
life
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 agenda consists of more advantages to being ready for social
life
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, boosting self-sufficiency, and obtaining highly demanded
leadership
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skills
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task response
To improve your Task Achievement, make sure to equally discuss both sides of the argument, providing a balanced view before stating your opinion. This will make your essay more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your Coherence and Cohesion by ensuring smoother transitions between paragraphs. Try using more varied linking words and phrases to connect ideas more fluidly.
task response
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coherence cohesion
Expand your examples by providing more specific, real-world cases or personal experiences, which can help solidify your arguments and make your essay more convincing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • life skills
  • budgeting
  • self-care
  • homesickness
  • stress
  • responsibility
  • social life
  • family obligations
  • financial strain
  • emotional support
  • personal growth
  • distractions
  • support network
  • challenging times
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