You recently stayed at a friend’s house and forgot your jacket there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Thank your friend for hosting you •Describe the jacket and where you left it •Ask them to send it back to you

Hi Marlene, It was really
such
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an
unforgetable
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unforgettable
moment
for having
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to have
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a group dinner at
you
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your
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parent's house
last
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night. Well, I can't deny that we had so much fun and unconsciously
got
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more bonding with our new batch
friends
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of friends
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. I, personally am getting excited to welcome the new semester ahead. It all thanks to you.
Anyways
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, I just realized
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morning that my
green-corduroy
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green corduroy
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jacket
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which I wore
last
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night was left behind on your second-floor couch. To be frank, I have the other
jacket
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with me, but I can't get rid of that
jacket
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for the upcoming campus event which will be held tomorrow evening, since the organizer
ask
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the participants to wear the all-green dress code. So, in the meantime that stuff is really essential for me. If you don't mind, could you please bring that
jacket
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with you, so that
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"sloppy habit problem" of mine can be fixed? Let's meet at the college
cafetaria
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cafeteria
tomorrow afternoon at 12 and I'll treat your lunch
this
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time. I genuinely
wish
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you'll be able to come and meet with me in person tomorrow. Sincerely, Daffa

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a clearer introduction that summarizes the main purpose of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity; for example, separate the thank you note and the jacket request into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Check for small spelling errors, such as 'unforgetable' (should be 'unforgettable') and 'cafeteria' (should be spelled correctly).
task achievement
You did a great job expressing gratitude and friendliness throughout the letter, which helps create a warm tone.
coherence and cohesion
The use of informal language is appropriate for a letter to a friend, making the letter feel personal.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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