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The maps below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.(Anelya1)

The maps below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.(Anelya1)
The given maps represent
airport
Correct article usage
the airport
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 location at the nowadays and plan how it is projected to
be look
Change the verb form
look
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 after renovated next year.
Overall
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, it is evident that the area of an airport is forecast to be developed and extended in size, for reasons that it will be more convenient for passengers. First of all, the
numbers
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number
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 of gates after reconstruction will be
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 from 8 to 18 quantities in order to extend the size of
airfield
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the airfield
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 the walkway in the centre of
gates
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the gates
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 will be replaced by the sky train.
Subsequently
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,
in
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apply
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the security passport control part will be opened stores so that people can buy their needs.
On the other hand
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, the security and customs parts are predicted to be unchanged and
stay
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apply
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remain
.
Correct word choice
unchanged.
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 Following that, the check-in from
west
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the west
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 of the control section is planned to be relocated to
east
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the east
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 of
this
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 segment, where was the cafe,
while
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 the cafeteria is expected to be relocated to the opposite
site
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side
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 of
this
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 division.
In addition
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, on the place of check-in is predicted to be built bag drop. After that,
in
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apply
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the next segment of
airport
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the airport
an airport
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 is forecast to be set up the second cafeteria and ATM,
also
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this
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 section will be extended with the aim of opening car hire.
Finally
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, the two
of
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apply
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entrance
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entrances
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 is planned to be doubled.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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