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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about the proportion of single African youth four important
usage
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 of their phones social networks, Email, Digital cameras and
Phone
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 calls between 2016 and 2019.
Overall
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, the significant
usage
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 of mobile
of
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by
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 young people, who
is
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are
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 interested in Social networks from 2016 to 2019.
Whereas
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,
Phone
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call
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calls
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 as least number of per cent, who spend less time
in
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on
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 the
phone
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 through all four years. The remaining two reasons Email and Digital camera has a relatively steady number
usage
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. Social networks are an important thing for youngsters, Who used the
phone
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 for around half per cent from 2016 to 2019,
However
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, they
also
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 had some dip in 2017 with 48%. In 2016,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Phone
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 call
usage
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 was 10% and
then
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 it increased to 13% in 2017,
furthermore
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 calls faced a decline to 5% in 2019. An email had a constant number of users around 15% in 2016 to 25% in 2019,
In contrast
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, Digital cameras have decreased from 25% to around 19% in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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