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The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 who attended a Caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017.
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, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 generally increased over the period, with distinct trends observed for two categories of visitors. The
number
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 of
tourists
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 who chose to stay on cruise ships was steadily around 0,5
million
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, between 2010 and 2011, followed by a slight increase at 2,5
million
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of
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travellers.
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this
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, we can see a stable period that continued
to
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 2015. The minor decrease in the
number
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 of visitors was in 2016 by 1,5
million
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, after that it became the same as before.
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, the amount of travellers who decided to leave
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the island had an increasing trend for almost the entire period. Only from 2011 to 2012, it went down by 0,5
million
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. After decreasing the
number
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 of
tourists
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 started to rise significantly until 2017 by 2
million
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.
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, the total trends have a tendency of gradual growth between 2010 and 2015 and 2016 and 2017 and in the end had reached more than 3,5
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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