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The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table presented the data
of
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for
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 distance trips per year who matured population used sorte of
passenger
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passengers
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 between 1977 and 2007.
Overall
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, the table
is illustrated
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 seven ways to travel including walking , Bicycle, car , motorcycle, bus,
train
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 and taxi it
is
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can be seen that the highest level was
car
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the car
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while
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,
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motorcycle
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the motorcycle
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was
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 the lowest number in the table .
To begin
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 with, by 1977, the walking was 400
miles
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in contrast
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, in
the
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2007 it reduced to 300
miles
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 .
However
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, in 1997,
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 rate
decrease
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decreased
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 to around 20
miles
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 in 2007. There
are
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were
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 similar
number
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numbers
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 between
bus
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buses
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 and
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train
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trains
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 in 1977, but in 2007 the
train
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 was double bus in the year 2007.
On the other hand
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 , the popular used by passengers was
a
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the
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 car
as well as
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 the highest point was
during
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in
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 2007 to reach
at
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apply
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7100
miles
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.
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Moreover
moreover
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, the second most significant was
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train
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the train
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then
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taxi
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the taxi
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words train, miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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