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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course. Say how much cooking you have done since the course. Suggest another cookery course you’d like the school to offer.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to comment on the
short term
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 culinary program that I did during
this
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winters
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winter
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 in your institute. My name is Manmeet Sekhon and started
this
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cousrse
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course
 on
10th
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the 10th
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 of February which ends in March on
the
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a
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 similar date. My instructor is Tanya Sharma who is an Indian and very friendly with all of their students. I overjoyed
this
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 course
alot
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a lot
 during my academic sessions.
Firstly
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, I would like to tell
about
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you about
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 those who are attending classes with me and we
helps
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 each other, I like
thier
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their
 company.
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, I love the recipes
of
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for
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 meals which my instructor usually taught
is
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in
very
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a very
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 efficient manner. She gave us practical classes which I enjoyed the most. She told us some secret recipes though they are not available on
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the internet
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internet
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 too. During my curriculum, I learned so many Indian dishes which are
world wide
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worldwide
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 famous. Before
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this
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this,
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 I
am
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 not familiar with much cooking but I
attain
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attained
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 knowledge of
world famous
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world-famous
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 dishes
such
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 as dosa
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that
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which
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 is famous
among
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in
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 south
asia
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Asia
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 which I usually started preparing for my family and they
start
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 appreciating.
This
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 learning school solely taught food which
is eat
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 by people of India. But I would urge them to provide some additional programs which
teaches
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 us about desserts
of
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from
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 other countries
also
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.
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,
Dubai as
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Dubai's
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there
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apply
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dishes are well known and I am fond of
there
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their
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 desserts. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Manmeet

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance your writing.
task achievement
Make sure to check for spelling errors (e.g., 'cousrse' should be 'course').
task achievement
Consider adding more details about your experience to solidify your feedback.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your feedback nicely.
task achievement
Your passion for cooking and appreciation for your instructor comes across well in your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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