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The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
map
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 above depicts the development plan for a new industrial complex and employees' settlement.
Overall
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, it comprises
of
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6 features of different facilities,
such
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 as housing, industrial,
office
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, swimming pool, meeting room, and
office
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areas
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.
Initially
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, there is a roundabout located at the
center
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 of the
map
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, which consists of the industrial
areas
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, an
office
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, and a meeting room within the space. As the industrial
areas
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 are located at the
central
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 of the zone, the
office
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 is located in the northwestern part of the
center
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 and the meeting room is located
in
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on
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 the opposite.
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, the housing
areas
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 take
the
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up the
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 majority of the space
of
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on
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 the
map
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 as they are located in the three different parts of the
map
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,
such
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 as the northwest, southwest, and
the
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northeast. There are several facilities offered for the employees
such
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 as a parking space and a swimming pool which
located
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are located
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 adjacent to the residential
areas
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.
Last
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 but not least, not only located in the
central
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centre
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 of the area, but the industrial
areas
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also
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are also
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 located
in
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on
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 the far southeast side of the
map
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, office, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory complex
  • housing area
  • infrastructure
  • transportation links
  • amenities
  • environmental sustainability
  • residential buildings
  • communal facilities
  • work-life balance
  • industrial development
  • urban planning
  • green spaces
  • employee accommodation
  • accessibility
  • layout
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