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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experiences.

There is no denying the fact that
now days
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nowadays
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 companies have started to change their vehicles to self-drive because it helps many
society
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societies
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, autonomous is the best technology in human history, and it has a lot of benefits for anyone because it is more convenient than humans. To start with community sometimes when they driving use phones or
been
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are
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 tired of driving for a long time,
so
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apply
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that is
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 what causes an accident even with another car or an item, but if we use driverless that will help a lot to keep the accident percentage down, for an example china is the most country that uses
a nondriver vehicles
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a nondriver vehicle
nondriver vehicles
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 and that makes many
crowd
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 in china commits crashes and accident.
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, self-driving is the most entertaining for passengers to do, passengers can do their work
or
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watch a movie or do anything they want without caring or being worried about the car, all you have to do is get into the car choose the place you want to go and watch how the new technology works, many
folk
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 react on the robot driving and they give a good review on it, one of them says it is so comfortable the only thing you need to focus on the street and
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 it, and that gives us a good reaction on the new technology. In the end, driverless cars have a lot of benefits for the community and the population, if they trust and like
it
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 the streets and the cities will be safer.

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structural
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your stance on the topic and briefly mentions the main points you will discuss.
language
Consider using a more varied vocabulary to avoid repetition and enhance the quality of your writing.
structural
Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing the key points and reaffirming your position regarding the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
content
You presented relevant examples and personal insights, which adds value to your essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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