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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Write a letter to an accommodation agency for change in your accommodations (150 words) - explain your past requirements - why do you want to change your current accommodations - what are your requirements for the new accommodations

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to request a change in my current accommodation arranged through your agency. When I
initially
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 applied, I required a quiet, single-room unit close to my university. The studio apartment you provided met those needs, and I have appreciated its convenience and peaceful environment.
However
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,
due to
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 a change in my personal circumstances, I now find the space insufficient. My spouse has recently joined me, and the current unit is too small to accommodate both of us comfortably. I would
therefore
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 like to request a one-bedroom apartment, preferably fully furnished, within walking distance of public transport and local amenities. A quiet neighbourhood and reliable internet connection would be highly appreciated, as both of us work remotely. I would be grateful if you could inform me of any suitable options at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Monica Sharma

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task achievement
Consider expanding your explanation of the past requirements to reinforce your argument for needing a change in accommodation.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph presents a clear idea, but try to provide even more details or examples to strengthen the overall message.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear logical structure with appropriate greeting and closing phrases.
task achievement
The tone is polite and professional, which is suitable for the context.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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