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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in four countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in four countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The four pie charts provided information with data about the three sources of
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electricity produced in
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,
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 , Morocco and Vietnam from 2003 to 2008.
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, it is evident from the charts that fossil fuel and hydropower were
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major
 factors for electricity production,
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 nuclear power was not interesting.
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 with a detailed analysis, Morocco had the highest percentage of hydropower , which accounted for 95% of the total.
Sweden
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 was the second place with just over a half , and the percentage of hydropower in Vietnam was just under
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 value by 44% .
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 had the lowest rate created by solely 14%.
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, an opposite trend in fuel,
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India
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 has the largest proportion
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accounting for 82%
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, Morocco has the lowest
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 only 5% and just under one for
Sweden
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 .
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, only two countries have
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 of nuclear power
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 and
India
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 at 48%.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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