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The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.
The two maps illustrate the changes in a
town
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 in America in the period from 1948 to 2010.
Overall
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, there were significant developments in the
town
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, with far more shopping centres,
whereas
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 the number of residential areas declined. Moving to a more detailed analysis, in the middle of the
town
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, the apartments and Greenland had been demolished to make way for new commercial centres. The local supermarket had been moved to the northeast, near the petrol station which
were
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 unchangeable over the period given. To the northeast of the
town
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, the factories had been knocked down and the airport
were
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 constructed in the same area. With regard to the south of the
town
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, the church, behind the canal, had been replaced by the stadium for different kinds of sports facilities.
In addition
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 to
this
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, there had not been cutting down of the trees and the roads surrounded by trees and the canal flowing along the
town
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 remained untouched.

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