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Its thought by some that It is better to live in a city, while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion?

Nowadays
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increosing
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increasing
 number of
people
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 are becoming
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concerned
 about
good
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 life. There are two
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diametrically
 opposed opinions on the matter. Some
people
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 assert that
live
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 in a
city
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 is
good
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 idea for
people
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while
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 others state that
live
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living
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 in
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village
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a village
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 is nice for everyone some
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families
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, and others in the
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forthcoming
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 essay I shall discuss both sides of the argument, and explain why I am in
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complete
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First
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 and foremost thing that some
people
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 feel is that a lot of humans live in a
city
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becouse
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because
 the
city
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 is very
beatifuland
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beautiful and
 modern. Now some humans live in a
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flat
float
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city
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a city
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becouse
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because
 there are a lot of
flaats
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flats
floats
 in the
city
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 and
people
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 live here.
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 my brother entered university and he
live
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 in a town. My bro
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 that
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 place is
beatiful
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beautiful
, interesting and his
livingroom
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living room
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 which his
flaat
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flat
float
 is very comfortable. I am going to live in a
city
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 after
year
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a year
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becouse
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because
 I will study university it is in Tashkent. Personally, I
belive
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believe
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 that
live
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 in
modern
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a modern
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 place
very
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 nice for us and we see
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nature.
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, it is
also
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 possible to mention that
live
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 in
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village
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a village
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 situation is useful for everyone
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becouse
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because
 the weather is fresh. If we live in
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village
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a village
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 we grow
health
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. It should
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 be remembered that
live
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 in
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village
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a village
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 we don't
came
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 across
challange
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challenges because
becouse
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 there
are
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 everything
in
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here and we use these things.
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, Now we live in
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village
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the village
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 it is very
cozy
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 and everything is natural and it is useful for us. In conclusion, we may live everywhere
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, we live
comfortable
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in comfortable
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place
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places
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becouse
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because
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nice
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a nice
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 life.

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language
Improve sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. For instance, phrases like 'live in a city' should be corrected to 'living in a city'.
content
Develop your ideas more deeply to provide a better argument on both sides of the debate. Use more relevant examples and details to support your points.
content
You presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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