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The given diagram shows how biofuel called ethanol is produced.

The given diagram shows how biofuel called ethanol is produced.
The given diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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 how biofuel known as is produced and
use
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. The production of ethanol started with the plantation and harvesting of
plants
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 and trees. These
plants
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 and tree get their
energy
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 from the sunlight and carbon dioxide. After their full growth,
harvesting
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the harvesting
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 process begins and gathered stock
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is transport
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transport
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 to
plants
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 for pre-processing. During
this
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plants
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 and trees get crused and transfered
on
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in
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form
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the form
a form
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 of cellulose and
this
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 cellulose
than
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then
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went
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goes
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 to
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the labortory
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labortory
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laboratory
 for
further
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 processing. In
lab
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the lab
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 cellulose
converted
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is converted
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 into sugars and with the addition of microbes it changes into fuel form which is
than
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then
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 called ethanol. After that ethanol ships to market where it
used
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is used
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 in transportation, when it burns vehicle releases carbon dioxide which
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then
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is then
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 absorbed by flora and used as
source
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a source
the source
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 of
energy
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. In
a
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apply
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conclusion the given diagram
dipect
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depicts
 how a natural
energy
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 cycle
is working
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works
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. Vegetation is being used for obtaining biofuel and
on
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apply
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the use of biofuel
energy
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source
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sources
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 for greenery is being generated.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words plants, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • ethanol
  • fermentation
  • microorganisms
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • distillation
  • purification
  • dehydration
  • raw materials
  • storage
  • distribution
  • renewable energy
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable fuel
  • concentration
  • impurities
  • alcohol content
  • crop growth
  • conversion process
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