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The table below gives data on tourists visiting Vietnam from eight different countries in 2014.

The table below gives data on tourists visiting Vietnam from eight different countries in 2014.
The table displays information about foreign visitors
on
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Vietnam
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 from eight nations in 2014.
Overall
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, Chinese tourists in
Vietnam
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 are more than the visitors from any other nation, but they are among the lowest spenders. Australians spent the most
money
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overall
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,
while
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 tourists from
UK
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the UK
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 spent the most
money
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 per day. Nearly one and a half
million
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 Chinese travelled to
Vietnam
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 in 2014, but they are the second lowest spenders with
average
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an average
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$
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of $
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658.
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, almost one
million
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 tourists from Korea visited
Vietnam
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 and roughly half a
million
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 Japanese spent their holiday in
Vietnam
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 in 2014.
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, just over four hundred thousand Americans vacationed in
Vietnam
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 and they spent approximately $1238, on average,
while
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 they were there. Australians spent much more
money
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 than any other nation, which they spent $1893 on average. Have to mention that people from
UK
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the UK
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 stayed the shortest length of time with only 5.9 days.
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, they
payed
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paid
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 out $1379. Just over a quarter of
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million
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a million
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 travelled from Russia to
Vietnam
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 in 2014,
while
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 Cambodia had the lowest amount of visitors
with
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apply
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.
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, they spent the least amount of
money
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 with figures of 187,986 and $120 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vietnam, money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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