Some people feel that it is necessary to test new medicines on animals, while other people feel that this is not fair on animals and not necessary. Discuss both views ad give your opinion.

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an ongoing debate over whether testing
medicines
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on
animals
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is
right
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thing to do or not. Some people claim that it is not ethically right to experiment with
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of the little ones,
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others believe that it is the only way to ensure that medicine won'
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harm the consumer.
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essay will elucidate both sides of
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argument and provide a personal opinion. On the
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hand, it is evident that humans are the
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species
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Earth.
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I personally believe that
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don'
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t
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give us permission to neglect
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the lives
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of other
animals
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.
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, as many philosophers
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told
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shouldn'
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treat a closer
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as you wouldn'
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want to be treated yourself".
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, if we weren'
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the superior race of Earth and some more intelligent species used us as an experiment material I assume we wouldn'
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be happy.
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, there are many other ways to test the product without harming
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habitants
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habitats
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.
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, there is
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method that scientists recently
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invented
that allows testing
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on human cells.
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method is not only 100% accurate but
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harmless.
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, testing on
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is
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of the cheapest methods that can guarantee that medicine is not dangerous for humans to consume.
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,
medicines
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becomes
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more affordable to buyers and profitable for
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business
owners.
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, by implementing unethical medicine testing
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based on harming
animals
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, companies make their product cheaper so more people
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buy it.
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,
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practice
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tremendously
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small imprecision level,
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it being
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examined
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procedure
ever.
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,
while
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other methods may be accurate only 90% of the time, animal testing is always 99% accurate. In conclusion, it is evident that animal testing is inferior to other procedures
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its unethical ways of checking.
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, my personal opinion is we should promote other ways of ensuring the
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medicines
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medicine's
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effects.

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Ensure that all points made are clearly developed and supported with relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
Work on maintaining a smoother flow between ideas, particularly when transitioning between different points.
coherence and cohesion
Strengthen your argument by providing a clearer conclusion that summarizes the discussion and reinforces your opinion more powerfully.
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The essay presents a balanced discussion by acknowledging both sides of the argument.
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The use of philosophical quotes adds depth to the argument against animal testing.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficacy
  • unethical
  • alternative methods
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • misleading conclusions
  • strict regulations
  • humane
  • moral concerns
  • advancements in technology
  • viable alternatives
  • phase out
  • medical research
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