Some people believe children should get homework everyday, while others think they should not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing debate over whether should
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or not. Some people claim that
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knowledge and foster
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in the subject,
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others firmly believe that increasing
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of homework will
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in
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and poor
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-life balance for the student.
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argument and provide a personal opinion. In today's fast-paced
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many people tend to believe that by pressuring someone we make them tougher. As the famous quote says,"What doesn't kill us makes us stronger" I totally agree with
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, It is evident that hard times raise stronger
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,
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by pressuring someone too much we can
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accidentally
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break
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them.
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applies to increasing homework amount. I think
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it is obvious that
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will
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in
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for
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,
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perfomance
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performance
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, nowadays it is hard to manage
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social life and maintain a good grade together. Chasing high marks in
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can be very time-consuming, leaving no time for extracurricular activities.
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, in some countries like Japan or South
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students
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spend 10-12 hours a day in
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it is almost impossible to have a great GPA and be
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successful
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, many pupils dislike studying in
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. In the
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they can
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at their own pace without stressing or worrying. So making
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study
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subjects more outside of
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school
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will foster interest in them. A recent
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has revealed that 70% of the asked
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prefer to
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it provides.
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more inside and outside of the
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you will learn faster and know more about the subjects.
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, by
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implementing
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program
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will be pressured more outside of
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school
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and
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an increasment
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increased
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stress
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among them.
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encourage
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into learning
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more about the sciences.
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argument and provided a
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personal
opinion.

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