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As the political and social conditions around the world are transforming the trend of the immigration is increasing day by day . What do you think what can be positive and negative impact of immigration

The prevalence of political landscapes and social
circumstanes
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circumstances
 leads to
widespreading
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the widespreading
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 of immigration around the world. It has some merits like decreasing unemployment rates in crucial fields and shortcomings
such
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 as overcrowding in host
countries
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.
This
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provides
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 vast information about both approaches. On the one hand,
the
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immigration brings low unemployment rates as a positive aspect in the states. Some governments rely on foreign
labor
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labour
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 force in restaurant and construction industries. Because their citizens do not prefer to work under low wages
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 there
are
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 a lot of demand in these fields.
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,people who
willing
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 to accept waiter and master positions in other
countries
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. Political factors
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 as negotiations and free visa fees between
countries
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 and
also
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 social notions like
meet
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 a new culture influence both the
companies
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company's
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 decisions and
employees’s
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employees’
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behavior
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. After some suitable conditions,the organizations attract emigrants from other nations to low-paying jobs.
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, each year in
US
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the US
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,the boss of the restaurants and
constructions
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construction
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 proclaims Work and Travel
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to citizens of other
countries
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 in return
of
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for
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 hourly
based
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salaries.
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,
this
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 trend
influence
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 the welfare of the states as a negative result.The main concern of it is overcrowding in essential industries:healthcare and education. If Someone
who
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decides to stay in another country
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 work or university,they absolutely would use
conditions
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 of host nations. To illustrate
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, doctors
expose
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 to care a bit more patient in a short period
so
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it
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 leads to overwhelming among the inhabitants.
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, excessive using of facilities
cause
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to
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lower living standards
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 as less attention to one person’s treatment than before.
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, Donald J. Trump.
President
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 of the United States accepted a low
about
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prohibition
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the prohibition
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 on
emiggrants
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emigrants
immigrants
 to enter
US
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the US
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 because of complaints from local inhabitants and low
level
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levels
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 of natural resources. In conclusion,
the
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 immigration which
is broaden
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is broadened
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 by political and social factors causes to low unemployment rate in restaurants
while
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 it is making
an
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overcrowding among the people.
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, each government tries to consider all possible consequences
from
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this
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 trend.

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coherence and cohesion
Be careful with your sentence structure, as some sentences are a bit difficult to follow. Also, make sure to use transition words effectively to improve the overall flow of your essay.
task achievement
Clarify your ideas and ensure that each point is fully developed with clear examples and explanations, which will strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You have identified both positive and negative impacts of immigration, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing your arguments well.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • economic growth
  • cultural diversity
  • innovation
  • entrepreneurship
  • public services
  • social tensions
  • xenophobia
  • demographics
  • policy decisions
  • job creation
  • host country
  • community cohesion
  • nationalism
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