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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams below indicate the difference in
research
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students
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 in
research
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 fields at Australian universities between 2001 and 2010,
along with
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 a breakdown of
research
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students
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 by
gender
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 over the same period.
Overall
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, the number of international
research
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students
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 increased dramatically in 9 years.
In addition
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, the
scale
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 of non-local female
students
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 rose significantly which equilibrated the
gender
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scale
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 in 2010. As can be seen in the table charts, the total of non-local
students
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 studying in Australia in 2010 increased three times as much as in 2001 from about 5200 to 14 6000
students
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, and the number of local
students
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 grew minimally by about 6000 people. Turning to
gender
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 distribution, the proportion of male and female local
students
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 in
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 fields was relatively balanced in 2001, at 44% and 43% respectively.
However
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, the percentage of non-local females was just 4%, and the
scale
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 of non-local males was higher twice with 9%. In 2010, the number of male and female local
students
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 decreased slightly but still had a balanced
gender
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, at 38% and 35% separately.
Otherwise
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, the proportion of female international
students
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 climbed up to 15% which was fivefold in 2001, and the
scale
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 of males had a little grown to 12%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students, gender, scale with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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