According to some people, death penalty must be used as a punishment for people who committed serious crimes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of capital punishment?

Some people think that capital
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is a proper retribution for serious-crime inmates.
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and disadvantages of
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punishment
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, one main benefit of the death penalty is its deterrent effect
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society, preventing a rising number of criminals. What I mean by
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is that the government can spread awareness among people about the severe consequences they could get, if they commit
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crimes.
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, the China government passed a law which said that corruptors would get capital
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as their
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againsting the
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, another benefit is that governments can increase their
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means that they try to set strict rules that other countries might not be able to implement.
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, the USA
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a law
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that the death penalty will be given to terrorists. It proves that the USA tries to highlight
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that
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crime is a crucial thing, making other countries admit that the USA is a powerful
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. Despite the
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,
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can
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be a double-edged sword for a
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its relation to human rights. Everyone has a right to live, even if they have committed enormous sin.
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the principle of retribution, "an eye for an eye," meaning that a cruel action should receive the same revenge.
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,
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detainees who commit a manslaughter case
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. They might try to defend themselves but
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up killing someone, which is not justified for them to have
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punishment
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. The second drawback is that it could become a rule with less value. What I am trying to say is that people who have the same desire to commit serious crimes would consider
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regulation a stepping stone. In terrorism cases
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, these offenders are ready to be killed and believe that it is one of their ways to go to heaven.
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would mean nothing to
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group, making them even more wilder than before. In conclusion, despite the fact that capital
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has several
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and disadvantages, I personally believe that serious crimes,
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as terrorism and corruption, should be addressed in a more gentle way by the government. Giving full consideration before giving a verdict for these lawbreakers might be a better decision than directly giving them the death penalty.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to provide a more thorough exploration of both sides of the argument. While you did present some advantages and disadvantages, you could delve deeper, especially into the implications and complexities of capital punishment.
Coherence and Cohesion
In some places, the cohesion could be improved. Ensure that each paragraph flows logically to the next, perhaps by using linking phrases or keywords to connect ideas better, which will help in guiding the reader more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clarify some sentences for better understanding and consider revising certain phrases or vocabulary for precision and impact. For example, terms like 'detainees who commit a manslaughter case' may need more specificity or rewording for clarity.
Task Achievement
The introduction clearly outlines your stance, setting up a focused argument that presents the topic effectively.
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Your use of examples, such as the situations in China and the USA, effectively illustrates your points and demonstrates an understanding of real-world applications of capital punishment.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion reiterates your position while also summarizing the key points discussed, wrapping up the essay nicely.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrent effect
  • Irreversibility
  • Retribution
  • Human rights violations
  • Right to life
  • Cruel, inhuman, or degrading treatment
  • Cost-effective
  • Legal processes
  • Marginalized groups
  • Minority groups
  • Fairness and justice
  • Closure
  • Rehabilitation
  • Redemption
  • Public support
  • Ethical concerns
  • Moral standing
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