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In recent times, many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? freedom, Does it have positive or negatives effects on society?

There have been many cases these years of individuals deciding to live alone,
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 there could be positive and negative effects, I personally believe it
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 a positive impact on a
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wellbeing
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well-being
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. Most people prefer to live alone, and a few causes of
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 growing up in a large family, bad experiences with roommates, and the journey to adulthood and protecting one's peace. Going out, socializing, and working all throughout the morning and afternoon makes you crave only one thing: a quiet place to rest, which is the main cause of people living alone these days. It is debatable whether
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 has a positive or negative effect on society, positives could include a sense of independence,
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 negatives could include loneliness and safety. In my opinion, the positives outweigh the negatives, I believe everyone needs their personal space to be themselves and to distress after a long day. In conclusion, people deciding to live alone has a good impact on society if done wisely as it teaches independence.

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Consider providing more detailed examples to support your main points. For instance, elaborate on how living alone promotes well-being or provide statistics on mental health benefits.
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Try to improve the flow of your essay by using more linking words and phrases. This will help connect your ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
In your introduction, clarify your stance more explicitly and outline the main points you will discuss. This will set a clearer direction for your essay.
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Your essay addresses both the causes of living alone and its effects on society, which fulfills the prompt requirements.
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You have a clear opinion on the matter, and your enthusiasm for the topic is evident.

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