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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The provided line graphs illustrate the trends of
Australian
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dollars
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' value of
Australian
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 trade in three different countries, namely China, Japan and the United States, over a period of five years from 2004
till
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 2009.
Overall
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, the first line chart shows a continuous increase in China,
whereas
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, Japan's chart shows a clear fluctuation trend. Looking at
United
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 States graph changes, it had more stable values with slight increases and decreases. Looking at
china's
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China's
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 data graph in more detail, it had a gradual rise in exports till the year 2007
then
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 it had a noticeable rise till reaching 35
million
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Australian
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dollars
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 in 2009.
In contrast
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, Importing values had a steady increase until it realised 30
million
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Australian
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dollars
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 in 2008
then
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 had a solid trend till the end of the given period.
According to
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 the details of Japan's graph, it had a clear fluctuation trend with a sharp drop in 2006.
On the other hand
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, Importing values had more stable changes until reaching the value of 22
million
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Australian
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dollars
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 approximately in 2007. Followed by a 2
million
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 decrease nearly. Back to the line chart of the United States, it had more slight rise in both exporting and importing reaching 15 and 25
million
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dollars
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 approximately
then
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 a decrease
came
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after in 2008 to reach 10 and 20
millions
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million
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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