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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph presents the
number
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 of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean
Island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 has increased over the years. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 in total had changed to about 2.5
million
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visitors
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. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships started in 2010 from less than 0.5
million
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. In 2017, it increased to 2
million
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visitors
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. In the period from 2010 to 2011, it had increased to 0.5
million
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 , but from 2011 to 2012 , it had decreased to the same level in 2010. After that, it had increased until it reached 2
million
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visitors
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.
Additionally
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,the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 increased from 0.75
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 in the period from 2010 to 2013. Between 2013 and 2015, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 had not changed.
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,from 2015 to 2016, the
number
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 decreased to less than 1.5 and more than 1, but in the next period from 2016 to 2017, it backed to the same level in 2015 which was about 1.5
million
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. In 2010, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships was lower than
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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, but in 2017, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships was higher than
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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. In total, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 had increased from a
million
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 to 3.5
million
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visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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